First off, yay for fairy tales (and I wholeheartedly approve of using lesser-known ones).
In the first panel, you might want to make the sign on the tree a little clearer, and/or show the sign on one of the trees in the third panel. Just to make it clear where the words are coming from.
I'd like to see a few more panels with both the distraught maiden's story and the confrontation with Bryant (I'm always a fan of more detail--I'll be the first to admit that sometimes my desire for detail is excessive).
Also, I think you made the right choice with the last panel...though I definitely did enjoy the alternate ending as well!
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Comments from Laura
Date: 2011-11-23 03:52 pm (UTC)Comments!
First off, yay for fairy tales (and I wholeheartedly approve of using lesser-known ones).
In the first panel, you might want to make the sign on the tree a little clearer, and/or show the sign on one of the trees in the third panel. Just to make it clear where the words are coming from.
I'd like to see a few more panels with both the distraught maiden's story and the confrontation with Bryant (I'm always a fan of more detail--I'll be the first to admit that sometimes my desire for detail is excessive).
Also, I think you made the right choice with the last panel...though I definitely did enjoy the alternate ending as well!
Keep up the good work,
Laura